Vasile Moldovan
night of New Year
churches, mosques, temples, synagogues
under the same fireworks/ Jan. 2, 2016
Comment: Haiku knows the best way to achieve world peace.
At the nightfall
the hunter's knapsack
stuffed with tales/ March 15, 2016
the old hour glass ...
sand shadow running
on the white wall/ April 12, 2016
Comment: An excellent "shibui" (subdued) composition of color
up and down
here and there
a wandering dragonfly /Oct. 3, 2016
Comment: My version of the final line: "adragonfly."
"Wandering" is redundant.
Cezar-Florin Ciobîcă
fog
and so on.../ Jan. 19, 2016
Comment: A thin-fogged two-liner with a jab: "and so on."
before carnival
trying on a lot
of chemo wigs / April 22, 2016
Comment: Japanese wigs are superb, they say. Why not try some?
Summer's end
even the moon
has freckles/ Oct. 13, 2016
Comment: Good humor.
Ana Drobot
new moon—
I try to draw the smile
of the Cheshire cat /Jan.
20, 2016
season change...
instead of sea shells
empty Coca Cola bottles/ April 15, 2016
butterfly...
I once had
Everything / Aug. 31, 2016
Comment: I sympathize with the author for some reason. Butterfly" is a very good choice of word. The small letter of the first word is the result
Oana Boazu
the railroad tracks
heading the same direction—
overnight snow / March 12, 2016
deeper night—
the crow can't be spotted
anymore/ Sept. 23, 2016
4 am—
autumn rain more profound
than my sleep /Nov. 2, 2016
no coffee—
the world falters
with every step /Dec. 21, 2016
Comment: This is a bit overstated. However, in the second and third lines, we feel some "newness."
Lavana Kray
more light in my life...
a moth enlarging
the curtain hole / May
7, 2016
arms around the tree—
I'm listening
to upcoming book / Sept. 3, 2016
General comment: These evoke a strange feeling.
Steliana Cristina Voicu
Earth's sky—
Kerala tea plantation
in sunlight /May 20,
2016
quinces lights
filling
Grandpa's old room / Sept. 20, 2016
Comment: Nostalgic "quinces lights" outside late
Grandpa's room
Capotă Daniela Lăcrămioara
fifty—
my mirror getting acquainted
another wrinkle / June 22, 2016
Juliet's balcony—
only honeysuckle
climbs / July 11, 2016
Cinema verite—
a gust of wind
in her white dress / Aug.
22, 2016
Comment: The author knows how to use colors efficiently like
in black and white films.
Discolored
here and there on the tiles—
old piano cabaret / Sept.
1, 2016
Comment: "Discolored" and "old" are closely related. My way: discolored tiles / here and there / piano bar.
Dan Iulian
Firefighters' Day—
in the hand of the child
a four-leaf clover / Aug. 29, 2016
Comment: Recently I haven't picked up a happy clover. Tomorrow I'll walk to a nearby ground.
fat pumpkin—
I'm reconciling myself
to my roundness / Oct. 27, 2016
Comment: Dan, don't you think you'll be a slender man?
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