Shiki Monthly Kukai/July 2013

July 2013 Results


A.Kigo Theme:
EVENING GLOW



War Memorial -
the sunset reddens
the deep silence

Cezar-Florin Ciobîcă
(1,2,2) = 9 pts
**Very moving. We have a good straightforward setting up first line,
and a phrase where even the sunset has its moment of silence. The
middle line really lifts the whole last two line phrase


first kiss –
in the girl’s eyes
evening glow

Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
(0,2,5) = 9 pts

rainy evening glow -
the moon will rise again
on the dried pool
STOPS
(1,0,1) = 4 pts


sunset
swallowing my words ...
blood tests results

Sebastian Lucacs
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

relaxing evening -
a lifeguard is watching
the sinking of the sun

Cristina Oprea
(0,0,3) = 3 pts


so less
from my past -
evening glow

Eduard TARA
Romania
(0,0,1) = 1 pts

No Points

Evening glow -
Is this a poppy or
a shooting star?

Steliana Cristina Voicu
Ploiesti, Romania


autumn twilight
like a rainbow -
amazed child

Miorita

evening glow...
the old couple's gold rings
out of sight

Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu
**Intriguing phrase. Is it because of the end of day that the fear of
home invasion grows (although early morning and afternoon invasions
are more common), or is it a private practice between the couple?


B.Free Format Theme:
VEGETABLE(S)

old woman –
in her wrinkled hands
a smooth tomatoe

Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
(0,5,6) = 16 pts

vegetable market -
wandering among
fresh colors

Eduard TARA
Romania
(0,1,4) = 6 pts

a group of girls
picking bedstraws -
the first stars

Miorita
(0,0,6) = 6 pts

small town
my freckled neighbor
sells tomatoes

Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu
(0,0,6) = 6 pts
**Very sweet! Tomatoes are fruit though, not vegetables, didn't your
neighbour know that?

Grilled eggplants –
The postman brings me
an old friend letter

Steliana Cristina Voicu
Ploiesti, Romania
(0,1,1) = 3 pts

the basic numbers -
another spoon of spinach
before the dessert

Cristina Oprea
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

steady drought ...
dreaming of
growing lettuce

Cezar-Florin Ciobîcă
(0,0,2) = 2 pts

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