sâmbătă, 1 iunie 2013

SHIKI MONTHLY KUKAI-MAI 2013


A.KIGO THEME-LONG RAIN(S)

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14 Points
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ceaseless rain -
the autistic child
drawing an ark

Cezar F. Ciobîcă
**would have given more points if no gerund in l.3
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12 Points
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cold rain -
hugging
her urn

Seby Lucacs
(1,3,3) = 12 pts
**would have given more points if no dash in l.1

Sunday rain -
cleaning the old wax
from the candlestick

Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu
(0,1,10) = 12 pts
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10 Points
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field in rain -
scarecrow’s hat
for shelter

Virginia Popescu
PHOENIX
(2,0,4) = 10 pts
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9 Points
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endless rain –
she’s hiding her tears
in a handkerchief

Eduard TARA
(0,2,5) = 9 pts
**i.m.o.-would be better with "she hides..." in line two.
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7 Points
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last hug on the beach -
the rain still smells
of your after shave

lavana kra
Romania(RO)
(0,1,5) = 7 pts
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5 Points
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the long rain
after the long drought -
sound of jazz

Laura Csilla
(0,1,3) = 5 pts
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3 Points
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long rain –
the joy of snail who is away
for a walk

Miorita
(1,0,0) = 3 pts

long rain -
the acacia trees remain
without flowers

Ailoaei Cristina
(0,0,3) = 3 pts
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2 Points
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after rain -
from the flowers round
cricket song

Andronic Andra

(0,1,0) = 2 pts

no cricket song,
no star in the window -
will this rain ever stop?

Cristina Oprea
(0,0,2) = 2 pts
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One Point
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long rain-
I'm searching on Google,
images with the rainbow

Petru Ioan Garda
(0,0,1) = 1 pts
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No Points
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dancing in the rain -
all inclusive Argen' Tango
tanga exclusive

STOPS
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B.FREE FORMAT THEME: DUST

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Second Place -  35 Points
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dusty attic -
a one-eyed doll
still smiling

Virginia Popescu

(1,7,18) = 35 pts
**A strong image, poignant, and even creepy.
**If we forget that it's a painted smile, this slips into
sentimentality. But that would be our fault.
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13 Points
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dusty mirror -
face without wrinkles
today

Lavana Kray
Iasi-Romania (RO)
(1,2,6) = 13 pts
*
summer’s dust –
the page I never covered
with words

Eduard TARA
(0,3,7) = 13 pts
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9 Points
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dust to dust...
whispering poppies on
the old battlefield

Cezar F. Ciobîcă
(0,2,5) = 9 pts

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8 Points
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red moonrise
whirlwind
on the priest's tomb

Cristina-Monica Moldoveanu
(1,2,1) = 8 pts
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2 Points
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more dust on the map
of Middle East Peace Quartet -
gunpowder like

STOPS
(0,1,0) = 2 pts

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One Point
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Victory Day -
mother shakes the dust off
my grandfather's mantle

Petru-Ioan Garda
(0,0,1) = 1 pts

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No Points
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dusted shoes
and traces lost in water -
the cry of a gull

Cristina Oprea

empty cart
goes rumbaring –
a cloud of dust

Miorita
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